The Fifth Housemate: A Scary Story Inspired by True Events

My students are writing scary/horror stories  as a monthly essay piece. I decided to write my sample essay as inspiration for them. The story is based on  some events that actually happened with a huge exaggeration from my fantastic imagination. The names have been changed and the relationships are semi-fictional.

The Fifth Housemate


            It was a muggy summer evening in Thailand when the four friends moved into their house. Parkin and Paddy were brothers, and Kim and Shayla were best friends. The four had moved to the new town for work. It had been raining all day.

Parkin unlocked the door and opened it with a creak. The four friends all walked in with their bags. They looked around the big house. It was dark and dusty. There were spider webs in the corners. The house smelled like mold and dust. “This place is creepy,” Kim whispered. They heard a buzzing sound and the lights suddenly came on. Shayla gasped and Kim jumped. They turned around and saw Paddy standing next to the light switch. He laughed at their reaction. “Let’s put our stuff down,” he said. “Our rooms are upstairs,” Parkin replied. They all went upstairs and put down their bags.

As the brothers came back down, they saw the girls waiting for them with cleaning supplies. “If we do this together, it won’t take as long,” Shayla stated. Kim agreed, “Plus it’s raining out, we aren’t going anywhere anyway.” Shayla grabbed a feather duster and started to dust the cabinets. She opened up a drawer, screamed, and ran from the room. “There’s a freaking snake in the kitchen!” she screamed. Everyone looked at her like she was crazy. Paddy followed her back into the kitchen but no snake was found. After calming down a bit, Shayla began to clean again. She opened up a cabinet and gave a startled shout. “Oh my goodness! You guys, come here!” Kim , Parkin, and Paddy ran into the room hoping to see the snake. They saw Shayla holding a little doll. It looked like a laughing baby. It had dark skin and dark hair. It wore a yellow and red frock. Shayla giggled, “It’s kind of cute.” Paddy recoiled, “It’s kind of creepy.” Kim moved away, “It’s SUPER creepy. Please put that away!” Shayla put it down and continued cleaning.

After nightfall, the house was finished being cleaned. “I have never seen so many cockroaches in my life,” Kim remarked. The housemates decided it was time to eat. The brothers went into the kitchen to see if there was any food in the fridge. Parkin opened it up and jumped back with a scream. “Paddy! That’s not funny!” he cried. Paddy looked at him confused. Parkin pulled the doll out from the fridge. Paddy said, “I didn’t put that creepy baby there. Maybe it was one of the girls.” The two girls walked in to see what they were shouting about. “We didn’t put it there. We were just ordering pizza in the other room,” they said after seeing the doll. The housemates argued for a few minutes over the prank. Kim suddenly stopped talking. She looked around and said, “Guys, where’s the creepy baby?”

The terrified housemates looked around but couldn’t find the doll anywhere. Lightning began to strike and thunder boomed loudly. “Is anyone else getting scared?” Shayla asked. “Don’t let your imagination get to you,” Kim replied. The housemates continued to search for the creepy baby doll. They were about to give up when they heard three music notes being played from the pool room. They rushed in and saw the creepy baby lying on its side on the pool table. “I didn’t even know we had a pool table,” Shayla said. Parkin picked up the doll and said, “Apparently it was a music box?” He wound it up but no music came out. Paddy took the doll and tore off its head. “There, now it can’t bother us.”

They went back into the living area to relax now that the creepy doll was out of their hair. Paddy complained about being hungry. The doorbell rang as more lightning lit up the unnerved room. Shayla screamed. “Calm down, will you?” Parkin requested, “It’s only the pizza guy.” He went to the door and opened it up. There was nobody standing at the door. He closed it and went back into the hall. “Nobody was there. The doorbell rang, didn’t it?” he asked. Everyone agreed they had heard it. Then they heard three music notes coming from the pool room. Shayla sat on the couch quivering, “Nope. I’m not going in there!” Kim stayed with Shayla while the brothers visited the room. There was no doll there this time. They agreed to not mention it to the girls. They didn’t want them to freak out. They were assuring the girls the doll was still in the pool room when there was a loud knocking on the door. They all looked at each other. This time all four slowly tiptoed to the door. When they opened it, they found the creepy baby sitting on top of the pizza box with it’s laughing head back on.



The creepy baby doll that inspired this story ….and the painting I did of it.

Creepy baby

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